-lift doors sliding open;
-background 'factory' appears;
-->alarms still going and the clock is still freaking out, the big tandrad is strubbeling.
-the workman Josaphat is walking in, half naked;
-he fixes the tandrad;
-->alarm stops.
-Josaphat turns to Boss, when he is being aware of his presence, he lines up;
--> all the time Boss watches Josaphat in silence.
-Boss walks to Josaphat and tries to recover himself;
-he wants to ask what went wrong and why and to tell it will not happen again. But he stutters and stutters;
-->head of Boss gettng more red;
-->expression of Josaphat is getting surprised and not understanding;
-->Boss dreams away, drowns in the crush!
...........................................end of the introduction and encounter...........................................
The idea was to focus first on this part of the story. When I am satisfied with the result and there is time left, I will (off course) make also the rest of the story! Do you agree?!
Hey Benine, I like how you've losened up your drawings in the sb...thinking about the workload, maybe you could just add a couple of panels which can bring a clean ending to your story: 1) we see the boss in his office with the manual worker, now all cleaned up, and the boss looking at him in adoration and 2)the wife slaving away at the machine in the nederworld, punished for her bitchiness....i know is not very women friendly, but hey, if you make it is fine right?
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